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Hey Girl, Your Eyes Smell of Vanilla 3WW
Wednesday, February 20, 2008 at 05:32PM
3ww Prompt: Punch, Unravel, T-shirt
"Hey Girl", he whispered as he moved in soo close he overshadowed her view, with plaid and circumstance.
"MMMmmmm, Your Eyes Smell of Vanilla."
Her dignity unraveled like the laces of a corset.
His t-shirt was sweaty, riddled with coffee stains and cigarette burns.
The stench was intolerable, but her nostrils flared to engulf it.
Collapsing on his shoulder was all she could do to resist the dirty temptation.
The punch came from out of the blue or that small, desperate place within her that was unwilling to be corrupted. She had no idea she was even capable of it. Square across his brow...one, two, three times. Across the floor, in a puddle of car grease he lay, beaten by her vanilla laced lashes.
Reader Comments (16)
Welcome to 3WW and what a stunning debut it is. Love, love the last line.
Rose
xo
Welcome! This is only my second time dabbling in this awesome prompt-ish activity. I love it as I love your first try!
i love love love your writing today,...how unbelievably freakin' visual! (I am obviously not as wild with the wordage as your mighty self!) You are amazing!!!!
that was superb... right down to the very last "lash"....loved it
Not at all what I expected. I like your unusual way of putting the words together... to deliver a sensibility that entirely works.
--Gay
Way to go! Love it...
Very nice!
I loved it from the beginning to the end.
Loved the use of vanilla scented lashes--truly wonderful story
Magnificent writing! It's so sensual - meaning I can feel, smell, see everything in such detail. And you manage that with great economy of words.
Here's my favorite line: "her dignity unraveled like the laces of a corset"
Stunning debut for Three Word Wednesday!
Thanks for visiting me tonight, and for your very supportive comments :)
I too like the line "her dignity unraveled like the laces of a corset..."
Excellent!!
Heather
This is just so perfect...less is more in most circumstances. It is when we know the whole that we begin to loss the mystery. Thank you.
Loved your comment on my blog. I may have to start writing more so others that fill in the spaces.
b
Your words are carefully chosen, your sentences unique. I look forward to readnig more.
Welcome to 3WW. And thanks for the wonderful comments you left on my blog.
And by readnig, I meant reading. Sigh.
This is amazing. By Far my favorite post
xoxo
p.s. since you should take a
"her dignity unraveled like the laces of a corset" ...."moved with plaid and circumstance.."
great lines....great ending....great story.