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Wednesday
04Mar2009

Mr. Door

3ww prompt: Avenge, Genuine, Ramble


Did you know if I painted your portrait it would look like this?
Beautiful and closed, especially to me.

door by marisol diaz

In front of you I ramble, on and on and on.
Behind you I am genuine.
Inside you I would tread lightly to avenge my heart.

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Reader Comments (9)

This is just a fine piece of writing. So simple, yet so powerful.

March 4, 2009 | Unregistered CommenterThomG

Great photo and very evocative wriing

March 4, 2009 | Unregistered Commenterpia

This has a very gentle feel to it.
If and it is, addressed to Mr Door then I get this amazing image of you walking around inside the door, of course when you said inside you, you might have been refering to the house - even so, this still has a very gentle feel to it!

March 4, 2009 | Unregistered Commentersweet talking guy

like someone who is desperate to be heard, I think the door is like a invisible wall that hides one's own desires but when it is open, it can bring out that longings that springs from within, or something like that

March 4, 2009 | Unregistered Commenterlissa

Oh, I've been there...Couldn't have written it as well, however!

March 4, 2009 | Unregistered CommenterTumblewords

I could feel the sadness. Love that you added a pic!

March 4, 2009 | Unregistered CommenterAngel

This was so heartfelt...and I love the photo of the door. Beautiful!

March 5, 2009 | Unregistered CommenterFledgling Poet

wonderful. you make it seem so easy. :) bravo!

March 5, 2009 | Unregistered CommenterSan

Amarettogirl,

Very smooth verse.
Insightful, delightful,
succint without seeming too terse.

Tschuess,
Chris

March 6, 2009 | Unregistered CommenterSepiru Chris

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