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Wednesday
Jan062010
Slice
Wednesday, January 6, 2010 at 06:17PM 3ww prompt: Drain, Epic, Nibble
Love Slice Bergdorf Goodman window photo by marisol diaz
With the swell of the decennary
Your pea crab fingers nibble at my throat
white plumes erupted from the wave's crest,
washing up my deep frailty;
a drip of knowledge traveled down my cheek
a drain; for my soul is under the aegis of you.
You who have the blade.
Through all the tender lives infiltrating this space, epic we are not
For I too am the walrus
And you in all your glazed finery, slice me.
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tagged 3ww, marisol diaz, poetry in Poetry, Writing
3ww, marisol diaz, poetry in Poetry, Writing
Reader Comments (11)
my absolute favorite are the last two lines...I think I want this as my epitaph~~~
A drip of knowledge is such a cool line!
A great great piece in all!
I am so happy you are back. The lines in this blew me away, so many good ones, but the last two, bang, out of the park.
So many great lines in this. Welcome back to 3ww.
Very well written, the second to last line had the "wait... what?" effect on me and I had to restart the piece from the top. Nice unique usage on the 3 words! Good work!
So powerfully expressed! Grateful to have started writing 3WW so I may find more writers like you! Brava! Bold images, yes.
The last two lines are sensational. The rest was pretty damn good also
Your grasp of the English language is staggering. I loved the fact you used ‘aegis’. Welcome Back!
this sliced me:
;a drip of knowledge traveled down my cheek
a drain; for my soul is under the aegis of you.
You who have the blade.
beautiful
a beautiful journey
sooooooo good you are fantastic at writing and art brava! :) xoxoxoxoxoxoxo RINA