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Wednesday
11Feb2009

crash

3ww prompt: disarray, rabble, validate

by marisol diaz

Each thought is gridlocked on the blood infused highway of my nerves and arteries.

When the traffic begins to flow it does so in disarray - each thought crashing onto each other - breaking windshields, folding metal and permanently denting my heart.

The rabble of emotions you inspire makes the andrenaline rip the roof off the car and pull the victim out.

You walk away aimlessly and carefree of me.

Hit and Run.

If only you could stop, look at me, validate my licence and tell me I should be on this road and that crashes like this one are the result of mutual admiration.

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Reader Comments (9)

wow, this is a great metaphor. i enjoyed this immensely. i love everything about this esp: When the traffic begins to flow it does so in disarray - each thought crashing onto each other - breaking windshields, folding metal and permanently denting my heart.

February 11, 2009 | Unregistered Commenterfloreta

I, too, dig the metaphor of love being like a car accident. We seem to crash into one another, then drive off when the damage is done.

February 11, 2009 | Unregistered CommenterThomG

love does make an impact. Well written.

February 11, 2009 | Unregistered CommenterDaily Panic

Great metaphor, and the words are powerful and stunning. And all set off by a marvellous picture.

February 11, 2009 | Unregistered CommenterAnthony North

What a lovely piece of writing. I am totally captured by your metaphor and word choices. Images collide, crumple, and birth new images. My cheeks are hurting they are smiling so much.

February 11, 2009 | Unregistered CommenterSepiru Chris

Good one. I have missed your writings..


3WW: mysticism

February 12, 2009 | Unregistered Commentergautami

Aaahhhh...very intuitive. Great work.

February 12, 2009 | Unregistered CommenterZouxzoux

that is dynamite!!!... the road, crashing and highway w/o a license... awesome!!! and the end result mutual validation....

February 13, 2009 | Unregistered Commenterone more believer

Hit and Run. amazing metaphor, I've been away from your blog for far too long, <3
I also do not see Emery's comment so i believe i have won this round. :)

February 15, 2009 | Unregistered CommenterSeph

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