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3ww prompt Feb. 4th - crumple, illicit, nerve sketchbook page by marisol diaz

down fell my unzipped, jilted and beaten armor
the air pressure exuding from your mouth is about to crumple the metal into shivered, penalized tin
illicit because we shouldn't always get what we want - too many ruins are erected
left in the amber light is naked flesh, palpitating heart and one single raw nerve.

Comments

[stainboy]

very visual words, descriptive of pain and relief, inhale, exhale...great work, my love

[ThomG]

Very well penned. I like the descriptiveness all the way through.

[susan]

"illicit because we shouldn't always get what we want"

especially like this line.

[lucy]

hi Amaretto girl! TOO long since i visited u!hope u are well
your verse was intense! love it

[Tumblewords]

Powerful piece of passion and pain. Nice!!

[Meera]

Gushing words, gaping truth! Powerful.

Mine's a pure senseless passion - Scary Story

[Fledgling Poet]

I could feel the rawness in this piece...passionate yet heartbreaking.

[lissa]

kind of wistful, passionate, I like the ending

[Zouxzoux]

Whoa! Powerful!